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Post  qwuimp on Sun Nov 15, 2009 4:17 pm



Its not an uncommon event, I was told but it seemed uncommon to me it seemed like i had been the only one, the only one who had ever seen them, who had ever known them. i could remember them since i was a child they would play in my room or sit with me when i was scared, they never harmed me i dont see why they would they never changed me, they never betrayed me. It was not until i had turned 18 that they came to me and revealed themselves properly they were not monstrous or evil they were interested. I am now part of a group not that differen't from AA it's is known as EA. my name is Alfred Jones and i am an earthling. I have lived amongst the Osta since my abduction 20 years ago and I am happy.

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Post  Journey Lynn on Sun Feb 21, 2010 6:00 pm

This is very interesting. There's some grammar/punctuation/flow issues, and I think it could stand to be expanded upon, this idea of a child growing up being visited by aliens but not knowing it, or rather not being able to understand it because they never knew anything different. I would love to see this longer, with a more in depth depiction of the child's everyday life, and then maybe Alfred's life once he went to go live with the Osta. You've got some awesome ideas, but I think you can take them further. Can't wait to see more!
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